FIC + ART: The Smallest Moments of the First War

[rs_collab_mods]

Title: The Smallest Moments of the First War
Team: Toujours Purple (chalada & mustntgetmy)
Tropes: Break up & get back together
Rating: PG-13
Warnings/content: Highlight to read *none*
Medium and/or word count: Word count: 5.8k; Medium for the artwork: markers
Summary: AU: A bad duel forces Sirius to reflect on things that happened before the war even began and moves him to change the course of the war.

The Smallest Moments of the First War

Comments

[rissabby.livejournal.com]

I really enjoyed this story and collab.

There's some gorgeous writing here. the rough kiss and the quiet rebuke and the entire second paragraph ...
The pacing and energy of the very last paragraph was wonderful; it made your ending seem prophetically inevitable.

I liked the idea of Sirius doing raw, spell-less magic.

My favorite pictures were the last two. I loved Remus standing in his socks in a sea of letters he wrote himself. The last close-up is lovely. Sirius' expression speaks volumes.

I liked having the pictures interspersed with the story. It helps me to remember how very young they were when this all happened. It's ironic that Sirius is thinking the same thing (so young) about his attacker.

I am going to try to leave comments both places...

[brighty18.livejournal.com]

That was astoundingly lovely; you had me hooked from the first, beautiful paragraph to to the last, wistful sentence. It was extremely well-written and the writing had a marvelous lyric and rhythmic quality to it. I also have to say that, if this was co-written, it flowed remarkably well and it was virtually impossible to tell that more than one person worked on the prose. That might have sounded confusing, but all I meant to say was that the entire piece has a very solid structure to the the point that it really seemed like there was only one author at work. And maybe there was? Who knows!

And the art was incredible! The sorts of pictures you can stare at over and over again! I really love how you captured their style (70's, punk, etc.) and yet made it feel so genuinely Remus and Sirius. The details on Sirius's jacket were particularly wonderful.

There was a lot to love about this, but I was especially intrigued by little details such as wands overheating (which makes perfect sense, though I'd never thought of it before) and carving out the book as a trove for momentous. That last bit said a lot about Sirius' character, too.

This was just wonderful!

[luminousgloom.livejournal.com]

To be honest you had me at "team Toujours Purple"!

Really enjoyed this story, especially Sirius' paranoia is brilliantly done, and there's loads of very lovely writing. The recurring idea of small things changing everything is beautiful. And loved the last picture especially, their expressions and how serious they are, but how boyish too. Excellent job all round! Couldn't help thinking at the very end "...and millions of children will miss out on an epic seven novel adventure series, and an entire fandom will never come into existence..." haha!

[abyss-valkyrie.livejournal.com]

:D!!! Aaaahh!!What a nicely done AU route.I really liked the way you did this, it seemed like it would be all heartbreaking till the end but then you surprised me,I've been smiling all this time. Loved the drawings in there too. Sirius is such a sentimental puppy,I liked how he kept the letters and the feelings you described within them. Beautiful work!

[http://users.livejournal.com/_melodic_/]

Ooo, breaking up and getting back together is such an incredible trope and you all just blew it out of the water! Seriously! I just adored this story and the ending was such, pure love! <3

Oh and the art! Wow, really impressive and gorgeous.

What a lovely job team!!